My new animation"Gold cup"

[hell]

animation 37mb
http://leymarie.patrice.free.fr/cup.wmv

Enjoy it!
more pic, in my web

www.cgyh.net

Hope everyone like!

[stantang]

Very nice work. esp. the modeling/texture, lighting is pretty good too. Downloading the animation right now

I went to your site, but all link are 404...

[stantang]

Just finished watching your animation. While the design, models, texture, lighting and rendering are all outstanding for an individual work, I think you need to put more time on the animation itself. There are many area in the animation you can improve, like the walk cycle, the dragon flying, expression on the character, etc..., a lot of timing on the animation are off. Also pay attention to your camera moves, some of them seems a bit too CG, also some of the shot seem to be holding too long.

As for the storytelling, you might want to cut down the story to just one dragon and down to around 4 mins. You can have the opening just like what you have right now, then the character enter the chapel, walk to the cup like what you have at the "2nd" part. The dragon appeals, the character runs out the chapel and the dragon chases him. Then have the outdoor fight scene as the final battle.

I guess you must have seen the dragon scene in Shrek 1 many times as I can see a lot of reference. Go see it again, this time really check out the motion of the character and dragon, and the way they planned the action.

Just my 2 cents. Keep it up!

[choppy]

WOW~~~~SWEET!!

[hell]

我的操作業系統是簡體中文，所以留言比較麻煩！呵呵！
對不起，這個國外的連接是法國網站刊登了我的作品，我是用代理伺服器上的，抱歉，由於我一人制作，而且在前期建模和材質上花了太多的時間，動畫上沒有花太多的時間調，第一次系統的調角色動畫，還沒有什麼經驗！呵呵！很遺憾！
這個位址可以下載
http://www.cgyh.net/animation/cup.rar

[hell]

Just finished watching your animation. While the design, models, texture, lighting and rendering are all outstanding for an individual work, I think you need to put more time on the animation itself. There are many area in the animation you can improve, like the walk cycle, the dragon flying, expression on the character, etc..., a lot of timing on the animation are off. Also pay attention to your camera moves, some of them seems a bit too CG, also some of the shot seem to be holding too long.

As for the storytelling, you might want to cut down the story to just one dragon and down to around 4 mins. You can have the opening just like what you have right now, then the character enter the chapel, walk to the cup like what you have at the "2nd" part. The dragon appeals, the character runs out the chapel and the dragon chases him. Then have the outdoor fight scene as the final battle.

I guess you must have seen the dragon scene in Shrek 1 many times as I can see a lot of reference. Go see it again, this time really check out the motion of the character and dragon, and the way they planned the action.

Just my 2 cents. Keep it up!

我的英文很差，不過大概明白你的意思
發自內心的感謝你仔細的看了我的片子，提出了你寶貴的意見,聽了你的話也讓我受益匪淺，在角色動畫上我還沒有什麼經驗，我希望我的下一部個人短片能讓你滿意！呵呵！努力奮斗！